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pup

8 post s
19-Nov-2007
12:10 AM
Dear Forumers, could you kindly check the game section of my forum for mistakes? I'd be very grateful. www.enbooster.topf.ru. Whenever I ask somebody to help me, they think i'm spamming, whereas I'm not. would appreciate any help. thanx.

Last Edited on 19-Nov-2007 12:12 AM

TheMudge
The Real Mudge
2421 post s
19-Nov-2007
9:29 PM
I went to the link you provided. Where am I supposed to go from there?
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Rich Turner (The Curmudgeon Himself)
CeeBee

1335 post s
19-Nov-2007
11:02 PM
I did not see a game section.
Brenda

271 post s
22-Nov-2007
3:11 PM
I went to the story about Indiana and found a few things that could be changed.

hard-working day...I think we would say a day of hard work

20-year old...You need another hyphen.

In the rules at the bottom, there is an unnecessary "who" in the last sentence.

I tried to go directly to the Indiana story from your home page, but couldn't get it. I had to go to the rules first to click on Indiana.

Last Edited on 22-Nov-2007 3:18 PM

pup

9 post s
9-Dec-2007
4:56 PM
Sorry, I've been away for too long...due to health problems. Now, having been operated on.., I'd like to thank you Brenda and The Mudge for your willingness to help me. I'll correct everything first thing tomorrow morning. :)
SapphireMoon

153 post s
10-Dec-2007
9:57 PM
a 20-year old daring youth
-> a daring 20-year-old youth

after a hard working day
-> after a hard day's work

a letter in her closet which said
-> a letter in her closet. The letter said that

she had immense fortune which was
-> she had an immense fortune that was

Thus, the daring youth
-> So the daring youth

His long and extremely tedious quest for the missing sibling is highlighted by all kinds of media, newspapers in particular....
Question: Is "tedious" the word you want here? It makes the game sound dull, tiresome, and uninteresting.
Question: What does it mean for the quest to be highlighted by media?


I would suggest putting the objective here, before the rules--the what before the how. The rules have no meaning until you know what the task is.


Rules:

Rule 1: Stick to the newspaper style.
-> Stick to newspaper style.

Rule 4: Each entry should contain no less than 15 lines.
-> ...no fewer than...

Rule 5: The game lasts strictly a month.
-> The game ends after one month.
or The game lasts for one month.
or The game lasts exactly one month.
or The game has a strict time limit of one month.

The who player with most postings gains the victory
-> The player with the most postings wins.
or The player who has the most postings wins.

in the form of a short paper article.
-> in the form of a short newspaper article.
or in the form of a short news article.

pup

10 post s
14-Apr-2008
9:46 PM
Thank you. Now I see my mistakes and will do my best to correct them.